I said I'd give a review, so here it is~
I liked it, thus far, I'll be reading more that comes out in the future.
A few grammar mistakes, but those can easily be fixed
Lack of detail, in my opinion. It would've been nice to add some gruesome detail in the first chapter, a nursery exploded! You could've created some disgusting imagery with babies blowing up, haha. More on the characters look would be nice as well
Mystery: The mystery, and yearning for a next chapter you left was nice. The dude at the hospital, what happens to Topazo, why'd the hospital explode, who the hell Ian is, ect. It was very good.
Character design was sounding good, from the picture I painted in my head.
Follows Dragon Ball Z pretty well, with the hospital and stuff. Nice to see you came up with Saiyan names for most as well.
Overall, I'd say 7.5/10 so far. Keep it up!
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